Friday, March 9, 2007

Original- Write a different down fall

Rather the item being the great black pearl. I rather have it be small portable telescope. It would’ve been more interesting. The portable telescope could be a mystical way of finding great pearls. But the Manta Diablo is the keeper of it. However every time you use their shall be a consequence or a curse brought down towards the family that has been used. Since so many problems been caused of this small portable telescope the father tries to destroy it. But one of the members on the boat sees no point of destroying it but use it to be wealthy. The father is killed by the members on the ship. So the son is trying to fulfill the father’s duty and destroy it before it ruins every ones lives just because of ridiculous pearls out in the sea. Then it should be able to show that people lives are a lot more precious then some shiny accessory. People lives are priceless to anything in the world. No one is able to buy a human life back but buying a pearl is possible. So the suspense of it will be able to show that human lives are very important. It will cause a lot more drama and action towards the conclusion and at the end the son will destroy the telescope and the curse of all families will be released and everything will be fine. Even the Manta Diablo will disappear.

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